juvenilia: “Spin me a ribbon of…” (1989, Age 18) and a revision: “A Young Poet Whispers to Her, …” (2018, Age 47)- Stephen Fuller

All my old journals were returned to me last week. I discovered this poem in the first journal given to me as a gift. Decided to play around with it, a little bit of love poem and a little bit of Peter Pan.

Spin me a ribbon of’ (Juvenilia)

4/9/89

Spin me in a ribbon of

Gold and pearl, wrap me in

Green paper, I will walk to

The star in the upper left

Corner of the page, with you

I will go to the nowhere

Guiding me. Time is not to

Look for futures or timelines

Never maybe occurring. This time

Is for us now and it could

Spill. Drink of the present

Until a gentle intoxication tastes

You. I will smile into the

Whisper by your ears. How soft

It is to lie naked in your arms

We soar above the world and

Storms misconstrued.

As found in my first journal received as a gift.

Age: 18

A Young Poet Whispers to Her, …

1/17/18

Knit me a yarn of soft greens and gold,

Goddess, wrap me in blank paper:

I will follow the second star to the right,

And leap.

I will go to the Neverland you guide me,

And jump.

No time for the future nor timelines to imagine.

This time,

for us,

now, …

… spills.

Drink up until intoxication takes us.

I smile into your ear a whisper,

My breath teasing cheek’s down

One heartbeat, leaps…

“How soft it is to lie naked in your arms.”

One heartbeat, jumps…

“We’ll soar above and silence this storm.”

Age: 47

4 thoughts on “juvenilia: “Spin me a ribbon of…” (1989, Age 18) and a revision: “A Young Poet Whispers to Her, …” (2018, Age 47)- Stephen Fuller

    • Thank you, while I don’t know about good, I do know reading the original both to myself and out loud helped me hear how much my voice has remained pretty consistent. I hear in the original awkward phrasing that I would use to sound “poetic,” but the themes and images and feel sounds like Me… it was a cool find. 🤓

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